I miss our sundays at the park by the lake
With the
motherly banyans in more than one place
The
indigenous palms that could bend and not break
And the
ones that had trunks like papiermâché
It would
come unglued when they started to flake
And the
baby manatees that swam there by mistake
Swimming
right up to the sad little shoreline of clay
Considering
their options and then swimming away
Afraid of
the tangled ladies laying in wait
They were
just some old mangroves, and nothing to hate
I miss
these beauties like the leaves and their sway
And the
people who lived there like humorless gods
I don’t
miss them or their shimmering façades
The
towering fortresses that kept us at odds
Purveyors
of solitude, a circle of frauds
They
decided that the trees were obstructing their view
So through
much litigation and reddening hues
They
changed how the word “preservation” was used
The
bulldozers came and made everything new
I hate new
things when the motives aren’t true
So the next
time we have our sundays together
We should
go back to the park where the beauties were gathered
And return
something old to the glistening water
And honor
the ghosts of arboreal mothers
We’ll fly
in the face of the powers unseen
And then
we’ll make love on their big trampoline
Ooooh, trampoline sex. Nice!!
ReplyDeleteWell done as usual!
Finally the trampoline is a surprise :)
ReplyDeleteLovely.
exquisite elliot, of similes, metaphors, & symbols. the beautiful place i can picture though i've never been, & even if any of us tried, it wouldn't be the same. would it? the 2nd paragraph is my fave, for it feels so universal.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem, as usual. I wish I could write poetry. I'd just sound off about the suburban hypocrites, but you can make a great poem out of it.
ReplyDeleteI think I stayed at that condo, last time I was in Florida.
ReplyDeleteNice. I thought the rhyming was going to be forced; but it wasn't. Great narrative and imagery.
Sounds good! ;)
ReplyDeleteAwesome. The imagery is outstanding. I've only been to a mangrove swamp once, but goddamn if this poem didn't make me remember it with fond nostalgia and then bitter recriminations at those who would ruin that.
ReplyDeleteLovely! God, how I wish I could write (good) poetry! + Followed you back!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem! Have a lovely week. <3<3
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written.
ReplyDeleteYou have a tender soul. It's obvious in your poetry. Is it okay to say I much prefer this poetic blog to your other satirical one? I know this one does not have as many followers or comments but it feels more true to me. And gentle. I have the feeling you feel more yourself after having written here. I could be wrong. Just a guess.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
I wrote "feel" far too many times. Sappy. Sorry 'bout that. :)
ReplyDeleteYou are absolutely right, Crystal. My passion is for poetry and serious fiction. The other blog is just to draw attention to myself. I started Appellate Sky with the purpose of building a big audience and then directing them to my poetry. That's why I now put a link to this blog in every Appellate Sky post. You'll notice I don't do the reverse.
ReplyDeleteAs far as your second comment, I didn't get that all and I appreciate what you said very much.
Also, all the poems I've posted here were written a while ago. I'm just copying and pasting.
ReplyDeletemeant to say I didn't get that *at all
ReplyDeleteI echo Disgruntled's sentiments. The poem made me fondly remember kayaking off Key West, and I hate to think of that natural beauty being destroyed.
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautifully written, I'm so glad to have discovered you.
ReplyDeleteHmmm. I appreciate that you appreciate my sappiness. :) I can't seem to help myself.
ReplyDeleteWrite something new.
Well written!
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely wonderful writing again, Elliot! This one really touches the heart with it's topic ~ too much bulldozing in our society ~ very sad . . .
ReplyDeleteHoly shit. You're like, seriously brilliant.
ReplyDeleteI know someone else who is brilliant. Her name rhymes with...something that eludes me at this time, but basically it's you. And I am quite serious about that.
ReplyDeleteLovely imagery. What a sad story yet you put a great twist on the end. Thanks for giving us some hope there. Awesome.
ReplyDeleteI usually go with Bejeweled, only because technically "Reschooled" isn't a word.
ReplyDeleteOh, and just so you know, it's because of you that the evening of December 23, 2011 will forever be known to me as "The night I spent cursing my parents for not conceiving a more eloquent offspring."
And I am serious about that.
What a cute story, yet with a sad twist.
ReplyDeletei like your description in the first stanza - the mangroves and the manatees feel like home to me, too. and thanks for visiting my blog and leaving your kind comment - it's always nice to get encouragement from a fellow writer.
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