Thursday, October 6, 2011

Nirvana

            i’d like to be a clear soul arriving at nirvana
            immune to a million forms of outmoded dogma
            or maybe it would end like an icelandic saga
            i could die in battle and transcend to valhalla

            in the real world i don’t go anywhere special
            i drive to my workplace enveloped in metal
            when it’s all said and done i return to my dwelling
            the events of my workday are seldom worth telling

            sometimes i get this outlandish sensation
            when i’m drunk at a nightclub with no reservations
            that i could turn into vapor and ascend to the rafters
            and live in the colored mists, forever and ever

            when i fall in love it’s a typical disaster,
            a cocktail of feelings and i’m easily plastered
            the woman involved gets panicked and smothered
            and i become even sadder when i no longer have her

            but as soon as we locked eyes the saddening ended,
            the stillbirths upon which my sickness depended
            could finally sleep the way nature intended
            and give me a taste of this natural rapture

22 comments:

  1. "a cocktail of feelings and i’m easily plastered"

    Boom. That was my head exploding into candy.

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  2. Thanks for reminding me that poetry is fun to read. I love this.

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  3. Thanks to both of you lovely ladies. Suni, it's an easy thing to forget when you read what is printed in some of the major publications today.

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  4. Sweet Love Hangover comes to mind...

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  5. This is a good poem, true without being obvious. And I like the rhyme structure.

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  6. "The stillbirths upon which my sickness depended could finally sleep the way nature intended." That is one great way to describe moving forward without thinking things through and without listening to our own innate sense of knowing, what we shut out when we get needy or think we want something that ultimately would not be good for us. sorry, I seem to be on an analysis kick this morning. Good poem. I like the humorous and honest way you can view this aspect of life. There's a touch of the metaphysical among the physical.

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  7. I really like this! I gave you one of my weekly Goddess Awards for your sidebar if you are interested.

    In joy,
    Elise

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  8. when i fall in love it’s a typical disaster,
    a cocktail of feelings and i’m easily plastered
    the woman involved gets panicked and smothered
    and i become even sadder when i no longer have her


    Yeah, that about sums up my feelings. Maybe thats why many people just give up on relationships and just get a dog.

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  9. beautiful !
    keep writing more, would love to read :)
    #followed

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  10. Just imagine all the songs we have lost sice his dead.

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  11. " a cocktail of feelings and i’m easily plastered" this is SUCH a brilliant line! Nice to meet another poet! Hahaha, love it!

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  12. :when i fall in love it's a typical disaster"... i love this. It is true of us all. Single or not. I want to see more of this poetry!

    Thanks for following my lowly blog, btw!

    +followed

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  13. This is fantastic. Beautiful and accessible.

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  14. plaster caster vapors in rafters. colored mists in rapture. no one lives in nirvana. it's only a place they visit from time to time. appreciated more by those who've survived disasters, or spent time in dwellings enveloped in metal.

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  15. nice post, interesting blog, very informative.

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  16. Awesome. I love your word choices and your use of metaphor. Fucking great.

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  17. I didn't know you had a poetry blog now! This is awesome! Love you, dude.

    -Yer little sis

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  18. Now I want to reach the Nirvana.

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  19. Dear Elliot,

    Your exquisite words only remind me

    of my own failures with the opposite sex.

    I'm attracted to complicated 'Kamikaze Girls'

    and it always ends in disaster.

    Thank you so much for sharing.

    Cheers

    Mark

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